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Hi Jingying,

Can you please re-submit your Exercise 6 as a word document? Unfortunately the text you posted has a formatting error which is making it difficult for me to read.

Thank you!

Emily

Hi Ricky,
 
Great insight into Jeffery’s perspective! I like how even though he is only a little boy, he’s still very aware of the crime he has witnessed and is obviously quite concerned by it. It makes me think that the people of Centimetreland are very law-abiding, conscientious citizens.
 
I love what you’ve written and I think it would be grea…[Read more]

Hi Ricky,
This is a great news report – well done! Given the nature of the story world you have created, this seems to be a very newsworthy topic that, once again, has a great balance of humour. I can see you’ve submitted it in two parts which seem to be a first draft and a second draft. In my feedback I’ve combined them but when you go back and e…[Read more]

Hi Ricky,

Great piece of writing – I love your use of humour!

I’ve attached a document with more detailed comments/edits/feedback for you to take on board.

Well done! 🙂

Emily

Hi Ricky,

Great work with your poster. You have shown some fantastic multi-media skill in creating this and I can tell you have a great eye for detail and design – well done!

I find the ‘Come now or never’ line particularly intriguing. It really makes it seem like going to Rtrillion is a once in a life time opportunity and I’m curious to know…[Read more]